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These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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After covid outbreak in 2020, most universities have started online learning to provide
courses
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 for their
students
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.
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 way of learning continued to be used until now because it is considered an easier way rather than attending university. I personally think that being present in university classes is better than joining online. On the one hand, internet-based
courses
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 could be done anywhere, whether in the bedroom or even in a cafe.
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 might be useful for working
students
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 because they don't need to spend much time travelling to university.
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, coffee shop baristas in Indonesia have experienced having classes
while
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 doing their job, they do
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 because they need to earn more money in order to fund their family spending, so taking online
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 could help them do both work and study without giving up one of those.
On the other hand
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, science major
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 as engineering or medicine mostly have laboratory work or practical lessons in their syllabus. Those
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 involved lots of equipment
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 only available on campus.
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, attending that kind of course physically could help
students
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 understand the lesson better.
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, there is one article stating that half of medical
students
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 in covid era who learn most of their
courses
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 through Zoom are struggling in their co-assistant phase because they only learn it by theory.
To sum up
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 everything that has been stated so far, online learning surely makes studying more approachable to everyone but for some majors that contain more practical learning than theory it is more convenient to learn it straight from the class.

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task response
Ensure clearer thesis statement in introduction.
coherence cohesion
Enhance transitions between paragraphs for better flow.
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Elaborate more on personal opinion in the conclusion for a stronger ending.
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Good use of relevant and specific examples to support points.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are both present and relevant.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure is clear and easy to follow.
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