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There has been an increase in the number of homeless people all around the world. What are the causes of it?

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The rate of the homeless people live in all countries are rising nowadays. Sometimes people can not afford their live cost, and they can start to live in the street. There are many reasons for
this
 situation. One of them, unemployment has been soaring in many countries.
On the other hand
, some people suffer with depression or other disorders,
however they
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however, they
 can not handle with it so they have found themselves out of the home. I will discuss in
this
 essay the reason of increasing homeless people and some possible solution for
this
 major issue. It is clear that the number of unemployed people has been increased in the
last
 years. Overpopulation or technological development even
also
 causes jobless human being. Unfortunately, in
this
 situation can not
been
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be
pay
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paying
 rent so street life has
join
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joined
 a new member. The governments
should be hire
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should hire
should be hired
 homeless people and
then
 these people should be served the others. Maybe it
can be create
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can create
can be created
 a social difference and everybody try to find a new job
to
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of
 living
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 home.
Other
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Another
 major effect is people who suffered with some illness
such
 as depression, mental disorders. They
can not
can not
cannot
 deal with their illness and social connections is getting loose. Eventually, they choose an isolated live from the society in the street.
For instance
, In a Turkey municipality a social worker gives psychological support them to gain again. In conclusion, increasing homeless people are an issue for all countries to face it. Some reasons and solutions are given in
this
 essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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