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Men and women are capable of doing all jobs equally well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#men #women #jobs
The graph illustrates the trends of two lines: females and m
ales which
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males, which
shows the number of university graduates in Canada during 1992 to 2007. Overall, both of those courses demonstrate similar trends like there are several fluctuations until 2001,
however
, after that year, the gap of the numbers had rapidly increased. In 1992, the number of the female graduates which is recorded with the red had increased and reached the point (around 105,000) until 1995. At the same time, the figures of the m
ale which
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male, which
is recorded with the blue reached over than 75,000. The following year, both of the lines: red and blue had decreased and attained the point (almost 100,000 and around 70,000 respectively) until 1999. In 2000, both of the courses had increased u
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by
2007. The difference between them had steeply r
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risen
also
, the women and men graduate's hit the level (above 145,000 and almost 85,000 respectively).

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