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Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV. Why do they do this. Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people.

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Nowadays, people, especially young individuals tend to copy famous people by following them on media resources
such
 as social webs, television, and magazines. Every day scrolling our feed on the Internet we can observe celebrity’s
life
 by watching their stories and checking the news with their attendance. The phenomenon like fans and copycats is triggered by some factors, that make people want to put eyes on them and try to be outstanding. But why does
this
 phenomenon occur in our society? The
first
 answer to
this
 thorny issue is hidden in a child’s psychology. When children are interested in some popularities, they automatically identify them as a fancy and successful person. And
this
 fact belongs that a major part of teenagers start thinking about making changes in their appearance to be more attractive or more noticeable in our society.
For instance
, lots of girls in 12-15 ages adhere to trends,
therefore
, to achieve success and attracting more people to their stylish look.
Although
 the tendency of copying famous people is a very common method of drawing attention, it is an unnecessary thing. Undoubtedly, there are some benefits of modelling your
life
 after important personalities, like following the good qualities of our superstars or trying to keep good habits.
Nevertheless
, one should accept that it might gain temporary happiness by copying the lifestyle of celebrities rather than developing own originality. When a person doesn’t imitate someone more authoritative or attractive, it boosts confidence that leads to greater success in
life
. In conclusion, we all need to understand that copying someone’s wear, lifestyle, behaviour and other parts of a stranger's
life
 can damage or destroy our individuality.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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