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It is better to eat food which is produced locally by small farmers, rather than food produced by 'factory farming' and transported long distance. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

It is an indisputable truth that
food
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 habits play a pivotal role in health matters. Some believe that consuming
food
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 products of local farmers are beneficial to people rather than preferring foods which are produced by factories.
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 viewpoint finds favour with me.
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 manufactory farming products would be cost-efficient, traditional farming has many benefits associated with it. To embark on, there are two prominent reasons why factory farming is advantageous.
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, goods of factory farming are low-priced. With the technological sophistication and advanced science, agriculture can produce many products within a minimum duration;
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, it provides affordability in price to the general populace.
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, according to the survey taken by the Indian
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 Corporation, the Agri-
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 sector has increased 30% in production than previous projections taken
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 year, which reduced the price substantially.
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, factories have a robust security inspection system for products which elevates the credibility of the goods among masses.
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, quality can be ensured in the traditional way of farming by local farmers. It is irrefutably true that numerous chemicals like pesticides and herbicides have been incorporated into farming methodologies;
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, people are prone to be affected by detrimental health issues. To exemplify, it is witnessed that, a few decades ago, people were physically robust because of the
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 quality, but, now, nutrients have been neglected by hybrid products.
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, evidently, goods of local farmers can be purchased immaculately, whereas goods transported from a far distance would not be pristine.
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, these factors should be taken into account. In conclusion, while the trend of eating local
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 has become exponentially popular, factory farming
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 has its own merits.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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