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While it is sometimes thought that prison is the best place for criminals, others believe that there are better ways to deal with them. What is your opinion?

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Some critics consider that criminals should imprison to the jail, whereas there are many other beneficial approaches, which can be
instead
 of handling them. In my opinion, I believe offenders can have positive contributions to
society
 if they are not only puts behind bars. When it comes to
prison
, many taxpayers argue that paying the bills for criminal's accommodation is an illogical thing as offenders commit heinous crimes, but still receive benefits from
society
.
Therefore
, criminals should be forced to take part in doing community service in order to make a balance with taxpayers. Doing so, simultaneously, can
also
 make up
society
's needs,
such
 as lack of labourers to work unskilled jobs. There is no doubt that it is a cost effective punishment and a cheaper alternative to
prison
. For some offenders who have been sentenced to long term in
prison
, they could fact difficulties to be employed again after released.
This
 is because they have crime records, which are not accepted by
society
.
However
, doing community service can give them a new chance to reform, change their impression on
society
 and
also
 prevent them breaking a law again on the condition that they are willing to change their mindsets. What is more, if ex-convicts continue to utilize their personal skills during their sentence, it will help them to be employable.
As a result
,
prison
 is not the only method to retribution offenders. In conclusion,
although
 some supporters of the
prison
 believe that it is an optimistic way to sentence criminals, I agree with others that being effective to use ex-convict's skills to do community service is the best option for the public.
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