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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons for immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

#immigration #impact #society #consequences
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Since the beginning of Human r
ace, peopl
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the Human race
e have explored and settled at new
pl
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in
aces. In today's world
immigration
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 has become quite common. There are several factors which lead to
immigration
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such
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 as Job opportunities, education and better lifesty
le but it has
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lifestyle, but
 a massive impact on the society. As a starting point, we can look at the idea of
immigration
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 due to employment opportunities. Professionals are moving from their home
country
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 to other countries in search of better jobs. Individuals feels that are not getting paid well despite working long hours and having the required skills as well. Not only employment opportunities, but education factor
also
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 plays a vital role in
immigration
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.
For instance
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, one can feel that the best course needed for one's career development is not available in their own
country
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.
As a result
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 of
this
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, they try to search for educational institutions in other countries
instead
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 of their motherland.
Furthermore
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, people who are wealthy in their home
country
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 would feel the need to migrate to a different
country
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 because they believe that they would live a better lifestyle in other countries rather than in their own
country
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. Even though, aforementioned factors are the main reasons of
immigra
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tion but due to
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immigration, but
this
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 there has been an enormous impact on society. Population and economy are the two key elements that come to mind when examining the consequences of
immigration
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. Clearly, when people start moving to a new nation, the population of the host
country
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 would increase enormously.
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, more people start using their resources which lead to depletion of the
country
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's resourc
es swiftly and le
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resources, swiftly
ad to other issues namely pollution.
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 the population factor is critical, but economy
is equ
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the economy
ally important. To be more specific, when people move to different countries, it has a devastating effect on the economy of their home
country
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. As they would be paying taxes in their host nation rather than their own
country
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.
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, due to these consequences, there is a negative effect on the Society. The above referenced points illustrate the reasons and consequences of
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tion yet when r
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immigration, yet
ubber
meets
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the rubber
the road the better decision rests with the individual to move to a new
country
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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