The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine.Government funding should reflect this.

Health is considered as being the most valuable
atribute
Suggestion
a tribute
of successful persons.
Therefore
, it is very important to prevent the
dsmage
the occurrence of a change for the worse
damage
of body through any kind of method.
Firstly
, prevention should be easier to be done than treating or curing many various diseases. In
this
way people need an organised source of information, delivered by specialised persons.
For example
, hepatitis or
simmilar
marked by correspondence or resemblance
similar
diseases need a prevention campaign with physicians available to spend their time
im
to or toward the inside of
in
I'm
order to share their information in schools, offices and institutes.
Secondly
, all these prevention
ccampaigns
a race between candidates for elective office
campaigns
campaigners
need to be assured by government
programes
a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
programs
programmes
programmers
which means to allocate money enough to develop a structure of medical education taught since from childhood, starting with kindergarten stage.
Thirdly
, investing in people's health should be
prioritary
protected by trademark or patent or copyright; made or produced or distributed by one having exclusive rights
proprietary
for government, because having no ill workers means to assure a better
randament
.
This
leads to an improving economy of countries.
On the other hand
, nowadays, the phenomenon of corruption is widespread. In
this
manner, a significant part of fundings which should arrive at hospitals and provide a better quality of treatments and charges, are
,
Accept space
,
in fact, meant for others who are not interested in quality of medical services.
For instance
, in Romania, if you want a qualitative consultation you need to pay a private hospital, even though you have a medical insurance. In conclusion, the government should invest more money for
health department
Suggestion
the health department
,
Accept space
,
but
also
to assure the improvement of medical services, for both hospitals and patients.

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