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the best way to solve the world's environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. TO what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world #price #fuel
Excessive traffic and increasing pollution are affecting every major city
in
Suggestion
on
 the globe. To lessen
such
 problems, some people say that governments should raise the price of fuel
such
 as diesel and petrol. It may help to some extent, but I disagree that it is the best possible solution to solve the problem of
environment
Suggestion
environmental
.
To begin
 with, the number of cars in a country directly depends on the proportion of the population affluent to own cars.
As a result
, raises in gas price could invoke hard feelings among
this
 segment of people, but would not drastically change their behaviour in using cars. Even if the number of cars on the road is reduced due to higher gas cost,
this
 is not the best way to solve traffic problems.
Such
 policy would hurt the auto industry, place higher costs on current and prospective car owners, and be detrimental to the economy as a nation. In the long run, the final way out could be the construction of better roads and more effective use of available transport facilities.
Secondly
, there is evidence that waste gas from cars is not the leading cause of air pollution. The culprit may be the discharge of polluting substances into the atmosphere due to the rapidly growing manufacturing industry.
As a result
, reduction of the number of cars would not return us a blue sky and fresh air. We could better handle
this
 problem if we could increase control over industrial waste-discharge and adopt
more environment
Suggestion
more environmentally
 friendly materials and production equipment.
Finally
, other measures like the application of cheaper and cleaner energy resources could
also
 be a better solution.
For example
, we now have the ability to make cell-powered or even solar-powered cars.
Such
 energy is completely clean and plentiful. In conclusion, it is not the best way to control traffic and pollution by increasing gas price because
such
 action will hurt consumers and economy without achieving what is aimed for. Measures
such
 as construction of better transport facilities and development of new energy resources could be more effective solutions.
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