In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Time flies, living standards have been improved day by day, with the globalization, the generation gap
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seems to change the living environment as well as eating
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habit
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habits
and aspects of lifestyle among teenagers and their forebears. Many claim that
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problem will bring bad results, in my opinion, I see eye to eye with
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statement
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, eating
habit
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has great effect on
people
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peoples'
peoples
health, which is not an exception for children. It is obvious that children these days commonly consider fast
food
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as the easiest and the fastest thing to fill their empty stomach, which is provided in every corner of a
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
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as hamburger, pizza, etc. Fast
food
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did not exist in previous generation society. It is important to become aware of that
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kind of
food
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is not
containing
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contained
or containing very little nutrition. Meanwhile, in
the young
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the younger
younger
ages are better to consume
nutrition
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nutrition, food
food
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which useful for their brain as well as their physical conditions.
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, children do not eat fruits and vegetables as much as
previous generation
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previous generations
the previous generation
. The drawback of eating fast
food
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is getting obesity, which is becoming common issues of young people nowadays.
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, in
term
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terms
of lifestyle, children in the past used to play with their peers most of the time, whereas nowadays children are occupied
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by
modern and private gadgets.
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, students go to school by their
parent’s
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parents’
private cars
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of walking with their classmates as their grandparents did before.
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caused
from
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by
factors
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as too much rely on technological devices or stressful from academic. Many gadgets
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as computers or video games deprive time for physical activities in children.
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habit
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may have many disadvantages,
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, becoming addicted which lead to the lack of contact with their friends and
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get sick because they never do exercises.
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but not least, ways of communication among children and previous generations
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change. Old people like
enjoy
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to enjoy
enjoying
talking in person
in coherent
without logical or meaningful connection
incoherent
style whereas
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style, whereas
young people prefer chatting by phones and using teen codes.
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problem causes misunderstanding among them. In conclusion, the differences in aspects of eating
habit
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and lifestyle in children
is somewhat having
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are somewhat having
more negative impacts on their life compared with their forebears.
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, we all can solve these problems by mixing and balancing the old and the new mode of eating and living in an acceptable way.
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