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everyone of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#meat #health
Whether to become a vegetarian of not, it is highly controversial topic over the years. Many believe that it is an excellent way to avoid severe health disorders.
However
,
this
 essay will shed light on why being a
non-vegetarian
 is paradoxically beneficial.
To begin
 with, the primary argument in favour of having meat is that it contains a high amount of nutritions
such
 as fibre, protein and calcium are extremely essential to keep
one
 energetic throughout the day.
Moreover
, to some professionals,
such
 as sports-persons, a
non-vegetarian
diet
 is highly recommended.
This
 can be well explained by the recent example of
one
 Indian wrestler, Geeta Phogat who had to start eating chicken to acquire enough stamina for wrestling.
Therefore
, it has been seen that being a
non-vegetarian
 helps
one
 to remain physically strong.
In addition
, eating meat increases
one
's immunity.
For instance
, meat eaters have a high physical resilience to sustain themselves in an extremely cold or hot weather;
as a result
, they could not easily catch common sickness,
such
 as cold and high fever. According to
one
 statistic undertaken in 'Appolo' hospital in India, it has been shown the 65% patients who had been suffering from
such
 illnesses were the
one
's who tended to follow a vegetarian
diet
.
Thus
, it goes without saying that the consumption of
non-vegetarian
 food can lend to improved health. To recapitulate,
this
 essay has illustrated that a
non-vegetarian
diet
 has an extreme potential to raise
one
's physical strength as well as
one
's ability to fight against normal sicknesses. By considering these health benefits, it can be predicted that more people will start having a
non-vegetarian
diet
 in the foreseeable future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chronic diseases
  • balanced diet
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • plant-based diet
  • ethical concerns
  • environmental impact
  • deforestation
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable
  • Vitamin B12
  • processed meat substitutes
  • social and cultural implications
  • mitigate
  • full-time vegetarian
  • plant-based options
  • health benefits
  • commit to vegetarianism
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