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Some people say international sports event help in world peace? Do you agree or disagree?

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Some individual states that global games events are advantageous for community peace.
This
 essay agrees that global game events play a vital role in world peace.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will discuss the sense of
brotherhood
 and exchange of tradition among the worldwide people and
secondly
, it will discuss the
favoritism
an inclination to favor some person or group
favouritism
 of games authority to create new
country
 order frequently for international events. Global games give thrive to
brotherhood
 along with the exchange of tradition all over the world. People of different communities gather in one place, play together, stay together
,
Accept space
,
which develops a sense of
brotherhood
 among them and obviously when people of different countries meet they share their traditions with each other.
For Example
, in Olympics games which are started in 2014, the player from around the world gather in the same place and show
brotherhood
 and an exchange of traditions. International games authority should very care full while organizing the
event
 as they always try to organize the
event
 in different countries because if the
event
 will always have held in the same
country
then
this
 might be the un-justice for other countries player. Every
country
 should get the chance to host the
event
this
 will support their players and
country
 in both ways financially and sportsman spirit.
For example
, since the 2008 Champions Trophy series of cricket is always held in India no matter which
country
 team is winning, which lead other
country
 players in sense of un-justice. In conclusion, essay agrees that global games events are helpful for peace; provide friendship between player and countries, interchange traditions and biases of global games authority for building new
event
 order with a regular interval of time.

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