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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In various nations, there are a small number of people who can make
significanly
in a statistically significant way
significantly
high
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higher
 incomes. While it is thought to be beneficial for the country, many others consider that the state ought to put it under
survaillence
close observation of a person or group (usually by the police)
surveillance
civilians
 as well as regulate how much
one
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 can
make
engage in
do
. In my opinion, I agree with the idea that more income depicts
favourable impact
Suggestion
the favourable impact
 on every country. On the
one
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 hand, it is beneficial to a country when having,
although
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 a few, people with outstandingly high salaries and I agree.
Firstly
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, additional incomes
translate
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translates
 more consumption,
therefore
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, it helps increase sales for all sectors, especially for the luxury goods.
For example
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, rich people are willing to buy fifteen-thousand dollars of Hermes bag without hesitation. Another reason is
with
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to
such
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 remarkable pay, individuals are able to pursue higher and better education which eventually results in higher quality
work force
the force of workers available
workforce
.
Furthermore
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, fruitful income allows a person to access better health care systems
such
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 as better hospitals and well-equipped
facilites
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
.
As a result
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, citizens do not create
burden
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a burden
 for the government in terms of funding for health and education for
thier
of them or themselves
their
 people.
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, there should be a control and limit on how much
one
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 can earn, according to some. I
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 those suggestions have based on
such
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 specific ground. Due to having more purchasing power from favourably high salaries, rich people might use it to manipulate and create
unstability
an unstable order
instability
 for some special economic fields.
For instance
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,
one
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 is willing to bid higher price only to buy the house that he/she wants.
Thus
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, it forms a a new price base to real estate market that not so many people can get in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealth inequality
  • economic growth
  • motivation
  • talent acquisition
  • consumer spending
  • tax revenue
  • redistributing wealth
  • market forces
  • income disparity
  • social stability
  • freedom of choice
  • meritocracy
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