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Today, most people get married and give birth in their thirties rather than when they are younger.Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion? To what extent do you support this development?

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Nowadays, the majority of individuals marry and have babies in their thirties rather than at a younger age.
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 I believe
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 is a positive development because of some advantages
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 as
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 growth and financial freedom, the contentious issue of infertility is a cause for concern, and for
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 reason, I entirely disagree with
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 development. Late
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 and birth are beneficial to couples in some ways.
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 and foremost, couples will be able to develop their
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 path. Before
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, there would be enough time to focus on an academic
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, which may define the path to success. A final point to consider relates to financial freedom. Since the individuals might have been able to acquire jobs and establish their positions in the labour market, they may have a steady income which would serve as sources of finance for the family.
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, most of my colleagues at Lanny Exports Limited who developed their careers for three decades before
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 claimed they could afford the financial responsibilities.
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 to say, marrying around the age of thirties is quite positive.
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, a female could have difficulties giving birth in her thirties due to infertility. As a woman grows older, her chances of getting pregnant reduce. After all, science has proven that most female reproductive organs are usually more fertile at a younger age. Now, of what benefit will it be for an individual to get married and, perhaps, not give birth? In conclusion,
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 getting married in the thirties will enable the couples to take their time to execute the
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 plans, infertility is a risk that cannot be taken. In my opinion, late
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 is a positive development, but I completely disagree with it.

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