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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#governments #money #railways #roads
I'm going to start writing about why I think
that is
 alright that the government spend their money, no matter where are the origin of that, in railways
instead
 in roads.
In
Suggestion
To
 my knowledge, railways are an important tool for the industry development, since years and years ago, trains were used for material, mineral, basics products and goods transport; and all of them are very
importants
of great significance or value
important
 materials to develop and improve the current industry.
This
 development is the base of a nation, and the floor of a hard and
sustentable
capable of being sustained
sustainable
 government economy.
In
Suggestion
On
 the other hand, we have
this
 newest and ecologically clean transport
that is
 the railway, with clean energy, some of them are functioning with solar energy, electrical energy, and
wothout
in absence of
without
 contaminant
emisions
the act of emitting; causing to flow forth
emissions
,
in contrast
 with cars, trucks, motorbikes, buses that use to travel through the roads. Another point is time,
for example
, the quantity of hours that take to travel 100
kilometers
a metric unit of length equal to 1000 meters (or 0.621371 miles)
kilometres
 in
car
Suggestion
the car
a car
,
in contrast
 with train. The distances are quite faster using railways than roads. In
conclution
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, having in mind all these points and a few more
possitive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
positives
 reasons of trains are better (like safety or clean)
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 can affirm, that in my knowledge,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree with the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
desition
the act of making up your mind about something
decision
 to destiny more money in railways than
in
Suggestion
on
 roads.
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  • Efficiency
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