Some people think that purpose of museums should be to attract and entertain young people. Others believe that the purpose of a museum is to educate, not entertain. Disuss both view and give opinion

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Nowadays, many people are debating about the purpose of

museums whether

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museums, whether

it should be used for entertaining and attracting young people or educating material.

This

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essay will discuss both view and explain why museums should be lively. The needs of attraction and entertainment of a

museum

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are

very vital.

First

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, it is obvious that museums play an important role of a nation's tourism. In fact, tourists are very interested in

learing

the cognitive process of acquiring skill or knowledge

learning

hearing

about

new cultural

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a new culture

new culture

new cultures

as well as new languages and

tranditions

an inherited pattern of thought or action

traditions

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, there should be an attractive way to represent the beauty of the country through pictures, documents, and movies shown in the

museum

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Second

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, not only tourists but

also

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local people should enjoy the

museum

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. Since they have already been taught about

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information at school through

documents

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the documents

, there must be an alternative approach for them to really understand their nation's culture so that they can appreciate it.

On the other hand

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, the

entertaing

agreeably diverting

entertaining

interesting

aspect of a

museum

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doesn't seems

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doesn't seem

to be

nescessary

absolutely essential

necessary

unnecessary

due to the priority for education.

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, doing

researches

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research

and learning seriously in the

museum

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requires a peaceful,

quiteful

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condition. Too much of entertaining and attracting will unpleasant the researchers.

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, only focusing on decorations may cause the item's quality suffers, which means they are not likely to

offers

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offer

sufficent

of a quantity that can fulfill a need or requirement but without being abundant

sufficient

further

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informations

a message received and understood

information

for those who are looking forward to it. In conclusion, all the opinions mentioned above make senses, and

consequently

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, it is hard to come to an absolute conclusion. In my opinion, entertaining is very essential for a

museum

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because it can have positive impacts on the economy.

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, if the

museum

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can not

offers

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offer

enough information needed, online is

also

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a good option for those who are seriously researching.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

285 words

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Some people think that purpose of museums should be to attract and entertain young people. Others believe that the purpose of a museum is to educate, not entertain. Disuss both view and give opinion

Your opinion

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