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In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

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Child labour has significantly increased in developing countries over the
last
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 few years. Due to high inflation more people are susceptible to send their children in paid activities. Some people argue that
children
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child's
children's
 involvement in
work
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 could lead to severe problems. Others state that paid world could help enormously in developing skills, confidence and other
essentials
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essential
 traits of professional lives. I believe that
children
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children's
 involvement in
work
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have
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has
 dire consequences. It is often seen that children are more opted towards bad activities, those
start
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starts
 working in their childhood. They have to
interact various
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interact in various
 types of peoples in order to perform their daily job. These people can take advantage of their innocence by involving them in suspicious activities. Children have been rewarded against that,
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 increases their hunger for money and
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 they become criminals.
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 paid
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 plays
pivotal role
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a pivotal role
 in improving living conditions of
peoples
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the peoples
. Children start doing
work
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 in order to support their families financially. In recent years, life has become very difficult due to inflation.
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 why majority of poor people indulge their children in paid
work
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.
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, it could help immensely in their future. Learning skills open new horizon of opportunities.
In addition
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 to
this
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, individuals learn other essential skills
such
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 as
team
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
work
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, handling pressure situation and leadership. These skills could be beneficial for their future job. In conclusion, I believe that the disadvantages if paid
work
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 overweigh its advantages. Government should take necessary measures to eradicate
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 sin from society; youth
are
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is
 the future of any country and should not be deprived with their basic rights.

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