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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is an increasing popularity
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of
 junk
food
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 among working class people because of the ease in preparing them. The increase in ready made
food
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 has aided individuals in keeping up with the fast paced lifestyle in modern times.
This
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 essay will discuss the benefits of eating
convenience
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 foods as well as point out to the fact that it is dangerous to keep eating ready made
food
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 despite the advantages. Most young adults settle for
convenience
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 foods mainly because of the ease to prepare them and the
time
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 it saves them in preparing
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such meal
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such a meal
. Studies have shown that 89 percent of the American population between the ages of 24-49 prefers to eat snacks for lunch since it gives them the flexibility to work without going through the stress of grocery shopping or preparing an actual meal.
For
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example policemen
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example, policemen
 in the New York State Department prefer a
donut
a toroidal shape
doughnut
 and a cup of coffee during working hours
.
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in
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In
 addition, it saves the
time
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 of working class people and makes it easy for them to work and have a meal without losing many working hours to
cooking
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cook
.
Yhe
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The
 above points
shows
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show
 that it is better for working class people to eat ready made
food
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 than settling for a home cooked meal.
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,
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,
 the disadvantages to
this
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 trend far outweighs its advantages. While some people will argue that
convenience
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food
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 saves
time
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, it is worthy of mention that most of these foods are unhealthy as they contain lots of sugar and cholesterol.
Obesity which
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Obesity, which
 is a major problem in big cities can be traced to the consumption of
convenience
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 foods. It was pointed out in an article from Dietary Journal that 80
per cent
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percent
 of obese people consume junk
food
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everyday
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every day
. Since the figure is on the increase annually, it would be wisdom if people stop eating
convenience
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 foods. In conclusion, the increase in
convenience
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 foods can be traced to a modern lifestyle. While it is easy to prepare and saves
time
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, it is
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 detrimental to public health and
hence
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 should be avoided
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