Some people believe that the qualities a person needs to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
modern world
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the modern world
, everyone wants to be successful by doing the master level education and learning the techniques that results in success.
However
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, some people opine that there is no need for
higher degree
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higher degrees
a higher degree
to learn these skills, I partially agree with
this
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statement.
Firstly
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, to become successful in life, the
person
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should be hard working, as every idea needs sheer amount of time to develop.
Then
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there is a need of constant encouragement from within, as only a self motivated
person
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can motivate others while delivering a work as a team.
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, a
person
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should always keep the goals in mind and ensure that milestones are achieved in the expected timeframe.
For instance
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, Thomas Alva Edison, who invented Electric Bulb
,
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,
dropped out of school and its only his passion to invent something
for
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in
the
manking
the act that results in something coming to be
making
led to
this
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great discovery
On the other hand
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, the skills that a
person
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learned from an institute or a university
also
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plays an essential role in the life of
person
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to gain success.
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, In
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
, numerous students from the
prestigeous
having an illustrious reputation; respected
prestigious
business schools learnt about the management, financial, decision-making and problem-solving skills in the institute itself.
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, faces less problems, in smoothly running a startup business. To conclude, to become successful in
business world
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the business world
, one should need hard work
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motivation and focus supported by the quality education from the institution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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