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Analysts tell us that many people today feel stressed and think they have insufficient control over their lives. What problems do such feelings cause for people? What remedies could you suggest

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Stressed continues to be an unavoidable issue in modern society, as many people have difficulty in controlling their lives. While there are several problems that people suffer
as a result
 of
this feelings
Suggestion
these feelings
this feeling
, there is
also
 some solution that we can take to solve
this
 situation. Perhaps the most obvious influence of
this
 problem is lack of concentration. Depression can cause a lot of energy in the body while you cannot concentrate on doing anything. Even worse, if
this
 situation lasts it will cause insomnia and the quality of your sleep will decrease when you cannot relax your mind to rest. A
further
 problem is that it that people who have insomnia for a long time can experience negative health effects. They are more likely to suffer from heart disease, blood pressure or headaches. There are several solutions that could be taken to solve the issues.
First
, people should try to get help from family and friends because they can listen to you and give advice to help you overcome life difficulties.
Second
, according to analyst physical activities
such
 as yoga jogging affects the brain so it reduces stress effectively, helps us improve sleep and concentration.
Finally
, everyone should have a reasonable diet as eating lots of vegetables, drinking plenty of water or limiting fast food.
This
 habit will improve health and reduce stress in life. In conclusion, nowadays society is developing so the rate of people being stressed is very high, so I think the above solutions will help people improve their health and reduce depression.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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