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People often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in their lives. Why do you think this is? What measures can you suggest to make it easier?

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 is the most fearful experience any human can face, especially if they are satisfied with their current situation. It is hard to encounter sudden events without any previous preparation. In
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, and suggest how we can help control our stress during
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 with, doing something regularly makes it tough to quit after a certain period because we seek stability since it gives us some kind of safety.
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, most employees when they are offered
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refuse it, even if they are not comfortable with their present one. Only because they are used to their positions, co-workers, and managers.
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 become afraid of the known consequences which can be positive or negative, but most of the time we wait for the worst results, increasing our bad attitudes toward
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we should make attempts to accept our fear and
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 the victim mentality that stops us from going forward in our lives because of our thoughts of what may go wrong. Like giving a public speech when we are timid, we must tackle our inner thoughts and go for it no matter what the consequences might be.
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, trying to gain new skills,
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 improve ourselves. Doing
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 will help us foster our confidence and the ability to face any obstacles. Since we generally fear what we do not know
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 the consumption we have of not having sufficient abilities to encounter it.
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, it is completely normal to have some doubts about the future, resisting
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to not let these concerns prevent us from growing and learning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fear of the unknown
  • Comfort zone
  • Familiar
  • Inherently uncertain
  • Challenges
  • Necessary tools
  • Skills
  • Efficiently
  • Emotional ties
  • Stress and anxiety
  • Overwhelming
  • Cultural backgrounds
  • Social backgrounds
  • Adaptable
  • Change management
  • Coping strategies
  • Resilience
  • Support network
  • Preparation
  • Flexibility
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