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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree'?

#repair #buildings #money
It wastes a lot of money to renovate old buildings nowadays. While, some people think that we have to spend money on the new building. Overall, I completely disagree with the statement. The old building can represent the history
also
 it can use to be the travel attraction to learn about the
place including
Accept comma addition
place, including
 the new
generation
 can know and understand how they're becoming. Many people disagree with spend money with the old building. According to individual perspective, I think it's good to save and maintenance. Many people think that it is just the normal building that over the time to use.
However
, it can be a good thing to show the history about the
place
.
For instance
, how people lived in the past and
also
 it is about the architecture that new
generation
 or even
next
 century people develop the technology they cannot do the same with the original one. I will give the example from my home country we have the beautiful traditional house that In,
this
 period of time hard to find. While, we can just find the one that new
generation
 make it up. Another reason of
this
 that, if the government can come to take action and open it to be a tourist attraction like museum it can encourage many visitors, both foreign and local people to visit the
place
.
Also
, it can encourage people to visit the
place
. Another key point is it will very use full if there have the show or speaker that present about the information for all people that interest to learn about the history how the traditional people look like. In conclusion, the old building can represent many things so it very important to look after and save them for
next
Suggestion
the next generation
generation
 to see how people in past lifestyle. Someone should take action about
this
 thing always develop it. So I didn't think that repair old building is too expensive.
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