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27. Many people believe that majority of children in western countries are being obese. Is it true? Agree or disagree. Give reasons and examples.

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Obesity
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 has become one of the health issues worldwide in the contemporary era. Many people opine that it is not only affects adults, but
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 the youth in western nations. I totally agree their view and the essay will discuss
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 view with examples. Nowadays, researches indicate that more children are overweight or obese worldwide and
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 trend will continue to be upward.
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 may be resulted from unhealthy eating habits, easy access to fast
food
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, extremely busy lifestyles etc.
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, fast
food
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,
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 as pizza, hamburgers, fried chicken, etc., is not only children's favourite choice but
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 parents' because it is delicious for children and is convenient and cheap for parents.
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, many parents seldom cook for their children due to their hectic lifestyles and busy work schedules.
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, too much high-calorie
food
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,
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 as sweeties or cakes will cause
obesity
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 among children.
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, 
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was
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the food
 no longer as safe as those in the past.
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, poultries fed with steroid-contained
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 may
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 contribute children's
obesity
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.
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, lack of exercises and unhealthy lifestyle
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 lead to obese children as well. Novel digital gadgets keep children occupied on their interest in playing video games, watching TV, surfing online, etc.. The long-screen time will reduce their outdoor activities and contribute to a sedentary lifestyle which will cause children obese.
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, researches indicate that children who spent more than two hours on screen daily will develop
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.
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, mental health issues,
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 as depression or anxiety
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 dominate the youth. Medications for treating these diseases
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 cause
obesity
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 as well.  In conclusion,
obesity
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 has been treated as one of  the chronic diseases worldwide. The high percentage of children are obese due to the above reasons.
Obesity
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 even worsens children's confidence and competency;
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, parents and educators should guide children exercise and reduce the screen time in order to protect our future generation.

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