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Question- Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There is a significant place for
music
 in most cultures from ancient time.
certain
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Certain
 people believe
this
 is one of
ideal way
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the ideal way
 to improve
bond
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the bond
 between cultures at different age group.I would certainly agree with statement due to several reasons.
First
 and foremost
music
 is a subject that can be enjoyed by people at any age.
the
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The
 bond between the mother and a newborn reinforce when she
sing
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sings
rymes
correspondence in the sounds of two or more lines (especially final sounds)
rhymes
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 even though newborn can't understand the words he get pleasure out of
music
.
similarly even
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Similarly, even
Similarly even
 people can't understand the words of
forieng language
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the foreign language
foreign language
a foreign language
foreign languages
 they
can enjoyed
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can enjoy
 the songs of other cultures.There for
music
 is one way
appreciate
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to appreciate
 other cultures.
on
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On
 the other
hand if
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hand, if
 thing about books and movies language barrier is there to enjoy them.
Secondly there
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Secondly, there
 are several songs from different nations has become popular around the world.
music
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Music
 is
away
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a way
 can touch the
person
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person's
 heart.
when
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When
 people fond of some
music
 they automatically start to live that
cultures
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culture
 as well.
owing
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Owing
 to that
this
 would help in increasing the bond between cultures. To
some
a quantity of money
sum
 up I strongly believe that
music
has ability to bring
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has an ability to bring
 people together as
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 a universal language.
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