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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life.To what extent do you agree?

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Education is playing an important role in today's world and because of it many schools are established by government. Single-sex and co-educational schools can be seen in every country and it is argued by parents that sungl6-sex schools are more beneficial in
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, I fully disagree with
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 view.
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 with, co-educational schools have numerous advantages. The prime benefit of co-educational school is that it helps to reduce the
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 discrimination among students. As in past girls had not the right to
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 as the boys had, which leads to
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 differences and in result girls were always dominated by the opposite
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. But now due to co-educational schools, girls can
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 with the boys and can show them their power.
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Hence parents
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 should choose co-educational institutes so that the world can mitigate the issue of
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 discrimination.
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,
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 in co-educational schools helps both genders to remove the hesitation among them. If both girls and boys
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 together
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 it will benefit them in the future because when they will do the job with opposite
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 they will not face any problem to co-operating with their partners and
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 will help them to concentrate on their work.
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 in co-educational schools helps both genders to know more about each other and it can create more respect for each other and it leads in reducing criminal activities related to the female
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. To conclude, parents should choose co-educational schools for their children because it will help to change the thinking towards
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 discrimination and can reduce hesitation between them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • social interaction
  • real-world preparation
  • gender stereotypes
  • academic performance
  • healthy competition
  • personal and professional settings
  • reinforce
  • collaborate
  • representative environment
  • promote gender equality
  • break down stereotypes
  • social pressures
  • academic concentration
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