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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on unhealthy food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times, major health issues in every age group are increasing day by day. It is an undeniable fact that the biggest contributor to
this
 is
junk
 or unhealthy
food
. Some people believe that it is the high time governments should take initiative and increase the taxes on fast
food
. I strongly agree with
this
 argument because one of the basic reasons behind individuals eating
junk
food
 is that its way cheaper than the healthy
food
. I will discuss my ideas in following paragraphs. There are a number of arguments in favour of my stance. The most significant one is that if unhealthy
food
 will be expensive, people will definitely avoid eating it. Nowadays, almost every individual prefers fast
food
 over home cooked
food
 because of several reasons like it is cheaper, they don't have enough time to cook due to hectic schedule, etc. Another valid reason is that healthy foodstuff is very expensive all around the world. Most of the times, it is out of people's budget. They cannot afford healthy snack items. So, they eat
junk
food
 and give it to their children too.
Secondly
, people eat
junk
food
 because of the taste. They find it very delicious in comparison to
food
 items which are good for their body but are tasteless. They don't realise anything until major health problems arise. Obesity is the biggest concern around the globe. For an instance, in the USA almost 60% children are obese, which is an alarm for governments to take some actions. To sum up, I will conclude by saying that if governments increase the taxes on bad
food
 items, it will be a great initiative. People will eat healthier if they find them same priced. Major diseases can be controlled by
this
 small step.
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