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The chart shows the demography of Japan from 1950 to 2015 and their expected population till 2055. The table gives data regarding people aged 65 years and above and their percentage of total of Japanese population. Overall, the
number
 of people in Japan grew steadily over the years,
however
, it is expected to fall in numbers in 2035 and
further
 in 2055. The
number
 of senior citizens
also
 grew in
number
 for these years. In 1950, Japan had 84.1
million
 citizens, which rose steadily to 127.8
million
 in 2005. The nationals slipped in
number
 by about 2
million
, and reached to 125.4
million
 in 2015.
Moreover
, it is forecasted to fall
further
 to 89.9
million
 in 2055. The citizens above 65 years and over, too, rose by around 6 times, from 4.1
million
 in 1950 to 25.7
million
 in 2005, which was 4.9 percent and 20 percent of total population in 1950 and 2005, respectively.
Also
, it is going to rise considerably in coming years, by the data shown for the years 2035 and 2055.
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