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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled tea and pineapples in 2010 and 2015 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled tea and pineapples in 2010 and 2015 in five European countries.
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The given tables represent the
sales
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 of
tea
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 and pineapples in five European
countries
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 in 2010 and 2015.
Overall
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, It can be seen that
sales
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 of
tea
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 have increased in every
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countries
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country
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,
while
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sales
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 of pineapple increased in some
countries
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.
According to
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 the first table,
Tea
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sales
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 have risen especially in France from 2.5 in 2010
million
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 to 21
million
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 in 2015
whereas
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other
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countries
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 increase slightly
around
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to around
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 0.2 to 4
million
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 euros.
For instance
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,
sales
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 in Austria with 8
million
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 euros were two times higher than
sales
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 of
tea
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 in 2010. In the
second
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 table, It is noticeable that
pineapples
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pineapple
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sales
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 have grown dramatically in Austria, 32
million
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 euros higher than in 2010.
Furthermore
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,
sales
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 in France and
Netherland
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Netherlands
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 have doubled from 2 to 6.5 and 1.6 to 5 respectively.
In contrast
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,
sales
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 in Norway and Germany have declined. Their
sales
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 dropped to 2 from 2.8 for
Nor way
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Norway
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 and 1.9 from 3 for Germany.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, tea, countries, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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