Many people Believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Majority
Suggestion
The majority
of the population
are
Suggestion
is
of the opinion that
socal
relating to human society and its members
social
media's (
such
as Facebook) have had a great disastrous influence on the people and communities. I strongly agree because these sites have become channels for fraudulence and promotion of immoral sexual acts. One of the reasons why social networking sites have had a big wrong impact on individuals and society is that they have become
avenue
Suggestion
a venue
for fraudulent activities.
This
is because most people want to become rich without earning it through hard work, thereby they engage in various activities to extort money from others through the
internet
by claiming to be who they are not.
For instance
, in Nigeria, the rate of fraudulent activity has been on the increase in the
last
two years, one reason is because of the overwhelming development of the
internet
.
Therefore victims
Accept comma addition
Therefore, victims
of fraudsters are committing suicide.
Furthermore
, the
internet
have brought
Suggestion
has brought
about initiation of antisocial sexual escapades.
This
is because most pictures, videos, and animations on social sites are
ponographic
rather than being educative and entertaining, thereby making people to engage in different awful sexual acts,
such
as sexual perversions.
For example
, it was recorded in the Daily Newspaper recently that there is tremendous increase in the number of rape cases and sexual assaults.
As a result
of
this
there is growth in the spread of Sexually transmitted infections in the Society. In conclusion, I strongly believe that the
internet
have caused
Suggestion
has caused
more harm than good to the population and communities at large.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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