IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7

ın the modern life, family breakdown and divorce rates are increasing. Solution and discuss it.

#ın #life #breakdown #divorce #rates
All around the world, the number of divorce is rising and family connections are not close as much as in the past. It is believed that the people prefer alone, mostly than with family, from
this
 reason a nuclear family structure is getting fragile. In
this
 essay, I intend to explore the sources of
this
 problem along with some possible to it. In the modern life, individuals want to live lonely and everybody goes on their own way without taking any
such
 responsibility
such
 as a spouse or a youth.
This
 is because, the proportion of the extended family number is declining when compared with single adults or or broken families. Even if a person decides to married, after a short time she or he wants to break up from spouse.
For example
, İzmir city which is located in the west of Turkey has the most divorce rate. Surprisingly, the more modern and happier city than other developed provinces. It may be reflects marriage can not affect remarkably to personal happiness.
On the other hand
, single mum or dad impacts their kid's growth in a bad way. A kid grown up in like family, some physiological issues can be appeared to not observe a healthy parent relationship with the child. Due to parents should be thinking twice before divorce and they get some help Pediatric doctors for their youth.
That is
 to say, not only personal life affected by it,
also
 all in all society. It can be reduced that saying child health, and some advantages can be offered family with children,
such
 as tax free car, free baby diaper. In conclusion, I restate individuals take care about own happiness in the modern life. They choose to live alone, some of them never marriage, others get divorced. Doubtless, children are impacted most.
Thus
, the people should be though primarily their child's happiness.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: