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Too much money is wasted on repairing old buildings that should be used to knock them down and build new ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Year by year passing the buildings are getting older.There are several buildings in our society which are getting too old.People are likely to get repair the property, if any
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 embarked.Others argue that people should demolish the old ones and try to adopt new buildings.Let's discuss the both sides which will be elucidated in
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, Constructing a new building is not that much possible It lends a lot of money but
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 is necessary to do. To exemplify, we had seen in the newspapers there is a school which was constructed a long time ago, students likely to attend the classes daily, but
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 day there is heavy rainfall property can not control that much rain and it was dilapidated and the result is students suffered from injuries.
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 type of buildings should be denied and government should be responsible for
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 because they have to check each building and should think about safety measures of the people.For
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 type of buildings, government should embrace new ones.
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, There is an immense population in urban areas so, People are willing to live in some old apartments.
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, If there is any problem with the property like
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 to walls, broken glass, in proper staircase for these types of small things people can replace with new ones and no need to demolish and construct new buildings.When it comes threat to human life, even small issues better to go with new
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.Depend upon the
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 people should aware of whether to go with existing or new
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. To sum up, Construction new building is nothing but there is severe
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 in the existing
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. I tend to reiterate, people should check the old building before they spend on them it is quite useful or not.If we do not see its impact on us.
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