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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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As technology advances,in the future it is possible there will be no driver for all four-wheeled vehicles and only passengers travelling inside. Many people argue about the advantages
as well as
 the drawbacks caused by it. In
this
 essay, I will opine that the latter perspective is acceptable and effective
due to
 the danger of non-human drivers. It is true that driverless cars are much easier to use, they will save so much time in predicting the estimated time
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 arrival (ETA) and increasing the seat for the occupant.
For instance
, Tesla reveals the statistic that their autopilot system is capable of decreasing the time spent to travel by 30% because it uses the internet to seek the fastest way to a destination. Not only that, a small wagon is sometimes not enough for five members of a family but with autonomous cars, it will be enough. Both merits are
also
 good for the traffic, creating a good environment for travelling in the future. Apart from that, there are three major issues autopilot transportation will have.
First,
there will be no jobs for drivers which can lead to many families living in poverty because it is their main income.
Furthermore
, humans will forget their abilities to drive, they will only depend on AI machines which are bad for dangerous or urgent situations like when someone is in labour and needs to go to the hospital fast.
Lastly
, when in an accident, no responsibility will be held, the company will not take the blame and it will be a confusing situation for the victim.
To conclude
,
while
 it is a really good improvement on the road because people can travel faster with more people,
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 believe there are more significant detrimental issues that we will need to be aware of.
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task achievement
Ensure that both views (advantages and disadvantages) are discussed in a balanced manner to fully address the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices to improve the flow of ideas throughout the essay.
task achievement
Develop and support your main points with more specific and detailed examples.
coherence cohesion
Review and correct grammatical errors and awkward phrasing to improve readability and accuracy.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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