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Nowadays, many business meetings and training are happening online and not in real offices. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages in this matter?

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Suggestion
It's
 true that at present,
video
 conferences have grown at an exponential rate. While I accept that, virtual webinars can sometimes have a positive effect on the meetings, I believe that it is more likely to have a puzzle. On the one hand, it can be acknowledged that the merits of online
video
 conferences are evident. The
first
 possible impact, online
video
 conferencing programs in business help reduce cost. The cost of an e-conferencing for organizing meeting rooms, printing documents, using electricity and water,… can range from a few million to tens of millions depending on the size of the organization. The money saved could be better spent on more important aspects
such
 as marketing, which brings in more potential customers. Organizing online business meetings or webinars not only save
money but
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money, but
also
 save time. Web conferences allow many participants from another place, country,… Attendants can directly see and exchange together,
therefore
, time which is very important for bosses and their companies is saved.
However
, I would argue that the hazard of
video
 conferences
far eclipse
Suggestion
far eclipses
 the aforementioned merit.
First
 disadvantage, web meetings require a reliable internet
connection
. If the network
connection
 was poor, it could result in disrupted communication and misunderstanding, which could cause any company great damage.
For instance
, an online meeting affected by an unreliable internet
connection
 could put a company at risk of losing a major contract since its foreign partner failed to understand the message it wanted to deliver. The
second
 drawback, setting up a high-quality web conference system is costly for small or even medium-sized companies. It
also
 costs a great deal in maintenance and in solving any technical problems that can occur at any time.
Finally
 is
technical limitations
Suggestion
the technical limitations
 that participants may have, which reduces the effectiveness of discussions or meetings.
For example
, the elderly may find it hard to understand and make use of the latest programs and software, or some participants can lose track of the progress of the meeting due to the slow internet
connection
 or platform errors. In conclusion, I would say that the potential dangers of
video
 conferences are more significant than the possible benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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