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Some people think that it should be made mandatory for parents to attend formal education on parenting. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that parents play a crucial role in the all round development of their children. A few people tend to encourage the concept of parents going through a mandatory formal training on parenting. I completely disagree with that viewpoint. In
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 essay, I will support my opinion with relevant examples. I think every parent tend to develop their own unique way when comes to raising their children.
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 exclusivity/ uniqueness in parenting make it an art that cannot be completely taught through formal
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, values that are taught during childhood are unique to a particular family or society; there is no way to generalize values.
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, my parents always considered non-vegetarian meal as forbidden for human consumption and always encouraged me to a vegetarian.
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 may not be the case with every parent or every family. Though formal
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 may teach you values, they may not always be tailor-made to suite your interest’s.
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, I believe that the best way to learn to raise children is through
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experience
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 can be just by observing people in your inner circle like close friends or relatives or it can just be learning through your own
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 on how you have been raised.
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, my parents always encouraged me to be adamant and outspoken, as they believed that these traits will make be bold and mentally strong. These traits are seldom taught through
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 they are lessons people learn through
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. To sum up, I think parenting is best taught through experiential learning rather than through formal
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. I am of a strong opinion that parenting is unique to a particular culture, family and living conditions and all these are not taught through formally taught.
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, parenting cannot be effectively taught through formal
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