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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century, and sea levels continue to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this, and what are some possible solutions?

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Nowadays , There is no doubt global warming is a major issue among human beings even though sea levels
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 rising its alarming rates but still global warming increasing day by day. In
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 essay , I will discuss the problem of global warming and I will conclude with some solutions to control.
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 with , Deforestation is the major cause of global warming. People are moving from rural areas to urban cities to lead better lives as there is a lack of resources in villages
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 people are shifting from village to city .
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 , More jobs are available in urban areas and good education as well because of
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 cities are expanding by cutting forests.
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Pollution
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 the one of main reasons for global warming whether it is water , plastic or air
pollution
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 .Any kind of
pollution
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 is very harmful to humans .
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 , A survey done by MBA students from Delhi University revealed that 60% of global warming happening globally because of plastic and water
pollution
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. Some developed countries
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 as Japan and the United Kingdom completely banned polythene.
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, In my opinion, it is very important to control global warming or else human life will be at the highest risk . The government or Individuals should take some necessary action to save our planet
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 as deforestation.
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 , plastic should be banned, and Government should provide more facilities in rural areas, and
pollution
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 should be controlled .
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 but not least , People should grow more and more plants to save our earth.

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logical structure
Your essay would benefit significantly from a clearer logical structure. Organize your ideas more clearly, separating distinct points into individual paragraphs.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion are present, but the conclusion could be more powerful if it recaps the main points discussed more clearly.
supported main points
Your main points are present but not strongly supported. Use more specific examples and provide more explanation to reinforce your arguments.
complete response
Your response addresses the task, but needs to cover more problems and more detailed solutions. Consider discussing issues like melting ice caps, loss of habitat, and refugees due to rising sea levels.
clear comprehensive ideas
Clarify and expand on your ideas. For instance, explain more fully why and how deforestation and pollution contribute to global warming. Your essay would benefit from more depth.
relevant specific examples
Your examples are relevant but some need more detail to be effective. For instance, explain how banning polythene in the UK and Japan helped those countries reduce pollution and combat global warming.
supported main points
You have identified key problems like deforestation and pollution, which are indeed significant contributors to global warming, showing your understanding of the issue.
introduction conclusion present
Your conclusion attempts to summarize the essay and suggests solutions, showing you understand the need for a strong ending.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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