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The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children

.The bar graphs provide information on how many
children
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 were spoken to in a French regional language and
then
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 carried on
this
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 tradition when they in turn became parents. 600,000
children
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 were often spoken to in
Alsatian
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 and
Occitan
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while
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 about
a
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apply
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half of
this
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 number habitually heard Breton. 100,000
adults
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 were frequently spoken to in Creole and slightly
less
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fewer
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 in Corsican.
Occitan
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 was occasionally spoken to over 1 million
adults
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 in their childhood,
while
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 only 400,000 were spoken to in Breton. The numbers that communicated occasionally using Creole and Corsican ranged between 100,000 and 120,000.
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Lastly
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,Lastly
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 those whose parents occasionally spoke
Alsatian
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 to them stood at 230,000. Keeping with the trend of passing on a French regional language to their
children
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, 400,000
adults
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 spoke
Alsatian
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 to their
children
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 and 250,000 communicated in
Occitan
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. The remaining three regional languages were not spoken as much. Less than 100,000
adults
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 used them to speak to their
children
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.
Although
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,
Alsatian
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 and
Occitan
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 were habitually used by French
adults
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 to speak to their
children
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 and
Occitan
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 was spoken occasionally to a greater extent than
Alsatian
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, those who heard
Alsatian
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 in their childhood were more likely to speak it to their own
children
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, alsatian, occitan, adults with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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