The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children
.The bar graphs provide information on how many
children
were spoken to in a French regional language and
then
carried on
this
tradition when they in turn became parents. 600,000
children
were often spoken to in
Alsatian
and
Occitan
while
about
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half of
this
number habitually heard Breton. 100,000
adults
were frequently spoken to in Creole and slightly
less
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in Corsican.
Occitan
was occasionally spoken to over 1 million
adults
in their childhood,
while
only 400,000 were spoken to in Breton. The numbers that communicated occasionally using Creole and Corsican ranged between 100,000 and 120,000.
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those whose parents occasionally spoke
Alsatian
to them stood at 230,000. Keeping with the trend of passing on a French regional language to their
children
, 400,000
adults
spoke
Alsatian
to their
children
and 250,000 communicated in
Occitan
. The remaining three regional languages were not spoken as much. Less than 100,000
adults
used them to speak to their
children
.
Although
,
Alsatian
and
Occitan
were habitually used by French
adults
to speak to their
children
and
Occitan
was spoken occasionally to a greater extent than
Alsatian
, those who heard
Alsatian
in their childhood were more likely to speak it to their own
children
.
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