The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children
.The bar graphs provide information on how many
childrenwere spoken to in a French regional language and
thistradition when they in turn became parents. 600,000
childrenwere often spoken to in
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thisnumber habitually heard Breton. 100,000
adultswere frequently spoken to in Creole and slightly
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Occitanwas occasionally spoken to over 1 million
adultsin their childhood,
whileonly 400,000 were spoken to in Breton. The numbers that communicated occasionally using Creole and Corsican ranged between 100,000 and 120,000.
Lastlythose whose parents occasionally spoke
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Alsatianto them stood at 230,000. Keeping with the trend of passing on a French regional language to their
childrenand 250,000 communicated in
Occitan. The remaining three regional languages were not spoken as much. Less than 100,000
adultsused them to speak to their
Occitanwere habitually used by French
adultsto speak to their
Occitanwas spoken occasionally to a greater extent than
Alsatian, those who heard
Alsatianin their childhood were more likely to speak it to their own
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