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In many cities many people are living in apartments and condominiums. Do these types of accommodation offer more advantages or disadvantages?

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These days, an increase number of people are inclined to live in a high-rise
condominium
 or apartment more than in a
house
.
Although
 it is more affordable to live in these types of accommodations, it is often can cause a cluster living and some serious problems
such
 as
fire
 risks. On the
one
 hand, residing in a
condominium
 or apartment is affordable more than living in a
house
. Due to few spaces are used to construct or build
one
condominium
room
 more than a
house
 which usually has a living
room
, kitchen, and some garden areas; people can pay less to afford a living space in
such
 accommodation.
Besides
, locations of most condominiums are adventurous for people who mostly commute by a public transportation.
This
 is because the area near a sky train or subway station mostly occupied by a
condominium
 or flat. For that reason, it is
easily
Suggestion
easy
 to save time for going to and back from work and spend the rest time with family or
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 hobbies.
On the other hand
, more tension trends to happen to people living in a small space
such
 as a unit of high-rise
condominium
.
For example
, people who live in a studio
room
 can get very little fresh air or scarcely see green area in their
room
, only a square view will be offered.
Moreover
, with many rooms contained in
one
 place, it is risky for
fire
 problems. To be more precise, since many people living in the same building as yours, it is hard to control living habits of other members in your place.
For instance
, some may cause
fire
 risks for just curling their hair by forgetting to turn off the curling equipment. In conclusion, even though it may be money saving for buying
one
 unit in a high-rise
condominium
 more than a full-space
house
, it probably causes some mental problems or serious issues
such
 as tensions and
fire
 risks.
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