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the chart below gives information about the number of social netwroking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015

the chart below gives information about the number of social netwroking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015
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This
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 bar chart shows the number of social networking
sites
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 visited by internet users
Canada
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in Canada
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 in 2014 and
in
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apply
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2015.
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, we can see from the data that, in general, there
were
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 a growing
thendency
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tendency
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then
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than
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 one site.
Although
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 just over
one fifth
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 of internet user was not using any social networking
sites
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 in either of the years, the
proportion
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 in
this
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 category decreased from 22
ratio
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 in 2014 to 21
proportion
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 in 2015. In both years the highest
proportion
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 of users in any group fell into the 'one site' Category.
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,
this
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 group declined sharply from 36
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 in 2014 to 28 interest in 2015.
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 contrast, the number who reported using two
sites
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, three
sites
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, four
sites
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 and five
sites
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 all grew over the period analysed In both years the
proportion
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 of internet users fell as the number of social networking
sites
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 increased, with only 2
percent
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per cent
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 using the five
sites
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 in 2014 compared to 4
percent
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per cent
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 in 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart overview
  • social networking sites
  • trends
  • adoption
  • comparison
  • significant changes
  • segment
  • growth or reduction
  • social media habits
  • patterns
  • multi-platform usage
  • decline
  • non-users
  • conclusion
  • digital communication
  • social media marketing
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