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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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People have different views about using computers in the classroom. While there are some good arguments in favour of negative consequences occurring
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 of increasing usage of computers, I believe that it is a positive development The introduction of computers has brought in a positive change in teaching and learning.
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, learners have the opportunity to access the worldwide knowledge with the easy tape and click. Information resources about any areas are available in the internet.
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, they can use them to research and broaden their horizons.
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, computers provide manifold useful tools, especially for education.
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, students and teachers use Microsoft PowerPoint in presentations in the classrooms which makes yours more effective than traditional ways of presenting.
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, using computers in education results in several negative ramifications. In terms of health, people tend to squander a long time on using these devices, but they do not acknowledge that they exert severe impacts on their eyes. If they are technologically-inclined individuals, they become isolated from the real world. The reason is the lack of interaction with the environment.
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 can lead to outrageous behaviours in young people even in the old. In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against the increasing use of computers in education.
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, it seems to me that the educational benefits will outweigh the downsides, especially in our life today in which technology is a dispensable part.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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