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A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Indubitably, if a nation is diverse, it tends to grow more rapidly and becomes more fascinating. I completely agree with
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 notion as I believe that masses
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 different nationalities improve social and financial status of the
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 they are currently living in.
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 with, there is ample, powerful and almost daily evidence that a community which has people from various regions become socially strong as it has multifarious cultures and regions to offer.
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,
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 phenomenon enables society to learn and adopt plethora of new languages which is again imperative for its social growth. To exemplify, India is recognized globally for its wide culture and traditions, and its mixed race population plays a vital role to achieve
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 significant diversity. To add-on, several prodigies concur that
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 trend gives a boost to the financial condition of any
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, it adds required competencies which host
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 might be lacking.
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, some countries provide “Permanent Residence” to the citizens of different countries to have a sufficient workforce in the fields like nursing, science and technology.
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 helps to maintain a perfect blend of population with different age groups. To illustrate, many aging countries
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 as Canada, Australia prefer to have young people from other nations to have more earning hands. To conclude, I would like to reiterate my strong belief that a
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 with vast cultures and diversity will not only grow at
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a faster pace
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 become more interesting in
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the long run
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