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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

2 - Formal Letter Write a letter to the manager. Write about your feelings and what you think the club management should do about the situation. Write 120-150 words.

Dear Manager, Thank you for informing me about the Fitness Club closure. I appreciate you taking the time to ensure. I was made aware of the situation in advance. I am writing to share a few observations and suggestions regarding renovation and digital updates. My intention is to offer constructive recommendations that may help enhance the participants' satisfaction. I am really happy because the Fitness
Center
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Centre
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 will be
build
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building
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 new equipment.
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 the planned updates, I suggest
modernizing
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modernising
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 locker rooms and improving the air conditioning in the training area.
This
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 change would greatly enhance the comfort and experience for all members. During the closure, it would be helpful to
inform
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offer
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 online workout sessions or free Wi-Fi systems for players.
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 way, members can stay active and feel supported by the club during the break. Thank you for considering these recommendations. I trust that they will contribute positively to the growth in participants' numbers. Please feel free to contact me if you require clarification or
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 input. Sincerely, Umida Abdulaevna.

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structure
Use one idea per paragraph and add line breaks to separate ideas.
style
Keep sentences short and clear.
grammar
Fix grammar like 'will be build' to 'will be built' and 'inform' to 'offer' or 'provide'.
word choice
Choose simple words, e.g., 'members' instead of 'participants'.
tone and purpose
Open with your feeling and end with a clear ask or suggestion.
tone
The letter has a polite and respectful tone.
content
It shows care for members and gives useful ideas.
content
It mentions concrete changes like updating gear, locker rooms, and Wi‑Fi.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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