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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together so to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

#people #music #cultures #ages
From
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For
 the past recent years,
music
 is considered as the bridge which connects the people from different countries and generations.
This
 is definitely true in my opinion as it holds the many positive expects. Some school of thought,
however might
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however, might
 believe that
music
 is very globalised and songs from different nations are more listened and
loved
inhabit or live in; be an inhabitant of
lived
 in the other countries.
As a result
 In
this
 way other cultures
are come
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come
 in light and become famous in other
Nations but
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Nations, but
 it might create the
haitus
cause to move by striking
hits
hats
 in local communities and gradually they would fall apart because of the cultural indifferences.
Moreover many
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Moreover, many
 international
music
 videos show nudity and drug consumptions and it might be a problem for many countries as they
seen
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have seen
saw
 it as inappropriate for their children's. I along with masses agree that
music
 has the power to bring people together.
To begin
 with, in the earlier time people were not aware of other communities and they had misconceptions about the other
Nations but
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Nations, but
music
 broke all the stereotype and countries who were not known or seen as conservative are now well known and loved all because of their trending songs. Apart from
this
music
 does not only bring the different people
together but
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together, but
 it helps them to understand the culture
from
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of
 different countries.They get to know about their lifestyle and traditions. To conclude
this
, In today's era
music
play
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will play
plays
 Vital role to bring the different nations together and help them to understand their cultural values and citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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