The availability of entertainment such as video games on handheld devices are harmful to individual and to the society they live in. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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The debate on

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games has been going on since they

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introduced to the public. Some people think

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games are an enjoyable form of entertainment while others are strongly against them due to

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addiction and its consequences. In my opinion,

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games are can be harmful, but they can bring benefits to people and the society as well. Every millennial has played

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games and a number of young people become addicted to them. There have been extreme cases that games addicted parents neglect their newborns and leave them to starve to death.

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games come in different genres from educational to violent. The most popular games on the App Store or Play Store are mostly violent, and since they are Very easily accessible to people, children are often seen playing fighting, shooting and killing games at a very young age. Some children cannot differentiate games from reality and end up becoming violent. There was a case that a teenager killed his grandmother because she nagged at him for playing games too much. When during interrogation, he said he thought his grandma could resurrect like

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characters, Not to mention sexual related and gender stereotypical contents where female characters wear over-revealing outfits.

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, it is understandable that many people do not have a positive opinion on

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games,

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, there have been any research proving the correlations between playing games and harmful behaviours. Whereas educational games are helpful for students, especially those with special needs. They can learn about the outside world, sounds, music, languages, history, etc. Some mobile games can be used in the classroom to engage students and improve their learning.

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designing and

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developing have become popular professions since the

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decade. The father of Flappy Bird has made thousands of dollars from it. Many talented young people are carrying a large amount of money from competing, playing and making games. In conclusion, playing

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can be addictive and destructive to other real life activities.

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, I believe there are ways to control the quality and manage the age of

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players so that

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games can serve better educational and entertainment purposes.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

screen time
sedentary lifestyle
social isolation
interpersonal skills
violent content
desensitizing
cognitive benefits
hand-eye coordination
problem-solving skills
educational value
stress relief
emotional well-being
social connections
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The availability of entertainment such as video games on handheld devices are harmful to individual and to the society they live in. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

write a letter to your manager ask for some time off to complete a qualification

Many parents complain that computer games have no value to their chuldren’s Study. On the contrary , those online games have produced a lot of negative effect on their mental and physical development. What is your opinion

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is society has to care for more and more elderly people.

Topic: robots and artificial are being developed to replace humans in the work place. Why this is happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?