Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Technology

is flourishing

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has been flourishing

by leaps and bounds and so is the media in

21st century

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the 21st century

. Today, all means of

information

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form

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a form

of social media, news

media etc

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media, etc.

media etc.

media arts

can be seen dominating public viewpoint in all forms of

individual's actions

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an individual's actions

and thoughts. In my personal perspective

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I think it is very arduous task to revert

this

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domination of media over the general masses.

This

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eassy

an analytic or interpretive literary composition

essay

will

further

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substantiate the same with

relavent

having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue

relevant

points. To embark with, it is seen that revolution in terms of technology advancement has made every

information

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availabe

obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service

available

to an individual instantly. Today each one is

this

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world is using

smart phone

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smart phones

a smart phone

and various kinds of media apps which keep them updated about world affairs by means of notifications. Apart from

this

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multimedia

information

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sources

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source

like television

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radio

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magazines etc

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magazines, etc.

magazines etc.

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are also playing

also

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playing an imperative role in moulding the choices of people. And additive use of these various forms of communications has made public to believe blindly in claimed

information

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Hence

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, all

this

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is making quite difficult for

general masses

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the general masses

to infer which source of

information

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is correct and

further

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leading to

choas

a state of extreme confusion and disorder

chaos

in the society due to a lot of

information

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sources claiming their input to be correct for a particular product, news, political

opinion etc.

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opinion, etc.

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adding to the advantage of

this

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attched

being joined in close association

attached

etched

emotions

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emotionally

emotion

to the various sources of media

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the top bosses

take

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takes

the merit of ignorant public for their personal benefits. For an example

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the

contoroller

someone who maintains and audits business accounts

controller

main line

inject into the vein

mainline

national media has capacity to mould the public opinion in terms of their political beliefs and the same has been seen in recent United Stated of America's

president

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presidential

elections where Fox national media biased their news to mould the opinion of

general public

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the general public

to their advantage.

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, with upcoming so many forms of social media platforms the product advisory and

romours

gossip (usually a mixture of truth and untruth) passed around by word of mouth

rumours

take

second

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to spread which sometimes prove to show some quite grave effects. To conclude,

this

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incessant growth of media's role in an individual's life can have some

deterimental

(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury

detrimental

effects in form of moulding their decisions and choices to their advantage. So, there is exigent need of public awareness to have supervision over the source and type of

information

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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369 words

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