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Success is often measured by wealth and material possessions. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? what makes a successful person?

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A successful person is measured by a parameter called wealth,
in other words
 money or materials. Is it a right way to measure a success by wealth?
or
introduces an alternative
Or
 it was insisted by wealthy people?
To begin
 with, people who are successful in increasing their monetary value are majorly considered as
achievement
Suggestion
an achievement
.
For instance
,
scientist
Suggestion
a scientist
scientists
 brought us so many inventions, which we
are using
Suggestion
use
 in our daily routine, but they were considered as against religious belief or they were not recognised. Major scientist lived their life in a very simple way, but achieved a lot, still not accepted as a successful personality.
Firstly
, it is a human nature, everyone run behind the money and someone achieved to get
more wealthy
Suggestion
wealthier
 and live a royal life, he will be taken as a role model.
Secondly
,
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