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Some people think that increasing the number of police officers on the street is the only effective way to reduce crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought that, by the increase in the number of cops on the roads, will have an impact on ceasing the criminal activities. I completely agree that, the only mode to protect the
society
, place or area from being under any unbearable situation, surrounded by the suspects is to strictly enforce the laws and should increase the awareness on
this
 issue.
First
 of all, it is everyone's responsibility to do something good for the well-being of others and serve the nation. Even if, someone is circumventing his or her obligation for the betterment of the country, they are just making difficulties and arousing problems for their own self's and their future generations.
For Instance
, if someone is convicted of doing any sort of offence and you are just evading them and letting them go, whatever the offenders do,
then
this
 act of avoidance may put you in a condition which may form as a consequence that you have to suffer nearby in the future. That's why, I think including civilians with the cops and working as a one unit, will be much easier to cope up with these problems.
Secondly
, illegal and criminal activities will going to put a negative impact on our
society
. In the other words, here negativity means that, others will going to commit the same act as they see.
For Example
, what if, the eldest one in the family is committing an illegal act and just right on cue, caught by one of his youngest family members,
this
 image will obviously go to put something bad on the child's mind. That's why, I conceived of crime as a thing which can easily disrupt the reputation of a good
society
. To summarize, I belief that as a hero serving for a nation, people will going to praise you with an applaud and will consider you as a high valuable person in the
society

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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