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Some people believe that planning for the future is a waste of time because they think that focusing on the present is more important. To what do you extent agree or disagree?

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In many large cities around the world, it has become quite common for people to either live alone or in a small family, as opposed to living in large extended family households.
This
 essay will take a closer look at some of the positive and negative aspects that arise with
this
trend
. On the one hand,
this
trend
 does have some positive aspects.
For example
, different generations want and value different things these days. Many young people do not wish to live the traditional lifestyles of their parents and grandparents.
Therefore
, living alone allows them the freedom to do as they please without having to face constant judgement or criticism.
Furthermore
, many older people do not wish to live the hectic, fast-paced lifestyle of modern city
life
 and prefer to live a slower-paced, healthier
life
 in the countryside during their retirement. Living alone, or in smaller family groups allows each generation to leave their preferred lifestyle.
However
,
this
trend
also
 brings several drawbacks.
Firstly
, as parents and grandparents get older, they may face a number of physical and mental health problems, and by living alone, they may lack the care and attention they need for their children.
Secondly
, children will have less interaction and influence from grandparents, and potentially miss out on important
life
 lessons that can be taught from grandparents who have a lot of valuable
life
 experience. Important traditions and customs may
also
 be lost from generation to generation. And
finally
, living alone, or in small family groups can lead to poor family bonds between generations. In conclusion, I believe that while
this
trend
 does bring some benefits, overall they are definitely outweighed by the drawbacks.
Submitted by Nguyen05 on

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