Countries such as China, India, and Japan have unsustainable population growths. In fact, many experts are of the opinion that the population ‘explosion’ which is now a very worrying concern, is the most serious threat to life on this planet. Give some suggestions to address this problem

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An increase in population creates an increase in demands which is why leaders of different
countries
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are anxious about continuously evolving populations across the
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.It is
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seen as a threat to other creatures on the earth. I intend to discuss some solutions regarding
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issue.
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with, Most of the
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's public is residing in two
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which are India and
China
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there were many reasons behind
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growth, the specific one was the uncontrolled birth rate. Because there was no concept of family planning in these
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and people used to have many children.
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, it can only be tackled by introducing strict laws.
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,
China
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implemented
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policy in the country which reduced the birth rate and resulted in dragging
China
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from 1st to 2nd position in the chart of the largest population in the
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. Moving
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, There is
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the upcoming problem of shortage of resources which needs the attention of policymakers of
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. Now, scientists and agriculturists are experimenting with indoor farming , in which an atmosphere is created inside a building to grow plants.
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, it is currently practised by few people but it would be a revolutionary step in fulfilling food requirements if it gets support from governments.
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, the government of
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provides subsidies for vertical farming which made the production in
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at the top in the
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with 17.9% per year.
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, It is a common problem in the
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so all the
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should come together to resolve it. In fact, developed nations have to help the developing
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to cope with
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challenge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unsustainable population growth
  • population explosion
  • family planning programs
  • gender equality
  • economic development
  • sustainable growth
  • fertility rates
  • technological advancements
  • infrastructural development
  • incentivize
  • tax benefits
  • subsidies
  • environmental impacts
  • social impacts
  • healthcare systems
  • reproductive health services
  • contraception
  • legislative measures
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