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Some think that children should start school as early as possible, while others believe that they should start school at the age of seven. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the modern world, people divide into two camps there
first
 want to send children as fast as they can while another has completely opposite desire.
Thus
, I cannot fully accept each position because all depends on situations and backgrounds that families have. Since, some parents work a full day and cannot spend a lot of time to child-rearing,
therefore
 they think is the best way send children at
school
 as fast as it possible.
Moreover
, some child exhibit interest in learning and in preschool them bored.
For example
, the world has many children that labelled today the Indigo: they grow up faster than other the same age child does.
Furthermore
, earlier start in
school
 means young people will begin to work sooner that in our uncertain world more important than sits at home.
However
, some people have more time for children, and they want look after them independently or with some help preschool.
Moreover
, kindergarten enhance some qualities of children to help them faster adopting to
school
.
For example
,
such
 establishments have schedule sleep, play or others activity that creates a habit to curriculum in future.
Besides
, if parents can spend more time with children they can prepare them for some part of a study
such
 as reading or writing.
Furthermore
, people cannot decline a fact that
school
 at the age of seven prolongs childhood
that is
 important in a tendency of the heavy burden of the curriculum from the start. To sum up, I believe that all families want the best for their children and due to either statement good parent can independently choose when send a child to
school
 and government should provide flexible enter to
such
 buildings.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social skills
  • Competitive advantage
  • Extended childhood
  • Educational system
  • Developmental stages
  • Psychological readiness
  • Curriculum
  • Peer interaction
  • Childhood development
  • Learning environment
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