Most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial.To what extent is globalisation a positive or negative development?

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Due to advancement in technology people are now living in a global village and it has many benefits, while others who perceive that it does not have advantages. I strongly believe that it has more positive than negative. Both aforementioned are explained
further
along with my inclination. To prove my viewpoint, I offer many advantages, the foremost one is people are getting more and more employment opportunities.
Moreover
, due to globalization companies are interested in pursuing large investment globally and it would create many job requirements.
Such
as, Tesla company which is related to automobile sector is about to launch new electric cars, for that company needs to construct many charging stations and eventually it would provide workplace to unemployed people.
Furthermore
, the
second
pros of globalization is the development of new technology.
Also it
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Also, it
is a positive trend, as it involves research from all over the world and with the support of each other, scientists are creating new technology which is beneficial for glob.
Third
merit to claim my view, is increasing education standards, People tend to get higher subjective knowledge from different parts of the world, it would be easy to get, because of good international relations among countries.
For example
, Gujarat Technological University has started an educational program under which, they decided to exchange students for a certain time period with Germany.
However
, globalisation has some disadvantages like, it can create health related issues.
This
can create mental disease in many people because of workload and over thinking about the future gives mental illness to many people.
Such
as, one survey illustrates that mental problems are there among people who works internationally. To conclude, to support and prove my inclination globalization has more pros than cons like, people are getting more jobs and improvement in education system,
however
, negative side which says that it creates mental illnesses cannot be neglected.
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